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she speaks in monochrome
stringing together words in every shade of blue
so blue
she choked on the sea.
syllables crashed against her teeth
wearing away the enamel
and carving out monuments in honor of all the things
she never meant to say.

tiny birds with oil-slick wings
and salt-stripped throats drowned in her esophagus.

she prays to a god that reeks of whiskey
and stale tobacco;
his eyes are as barren as an arctic tundra
but he loves her
like he loves the lichens growing on his spinal cord.
compared to the vastness of his embrace
her pollution is nothing more
than a prism of color after the rain.

her veins took root when she was still in her mother's womb;
the vague tree branches under her skin remind her of home.

she speaks in monochrome
but the black and blue shades never seem
quite as pretty as when the sirens begin to whisper
sweet nothings—
the toxic spill leaving her susceptible.
and her tiny birds and tree-branch veins
and monuments and lichen-covered gods
brace themselves for the fall.
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yesilm Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013
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melodysnow Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
feat here / ici : [link]
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melodysnow Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013
Merci beaucoup.
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
so vivid and raw. the nice verse wraps it nicely
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melodysnow Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
Thank you.
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
dear lord ... *nice = last
i mean it is nice, but i meant to say "nice" ;p
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melodysnow Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
Ah, that makes better sense. ^^ Happens to the best of us. :)
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
and i did it again ! LAST. i meant to say LAST. :lol: man.
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melodysnow Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
Awh :pat:
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
going to jump off a bridge now. will be back later ;p
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melodysnow Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
Oh :hug:
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successwithhonor Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Student Writer
so blue
she choked on the sea.


carving out monuments in honor of all the things
she never meant to say.


there is such a beauty in the paradox between destruction and naturality that the imagery resonates still long after the poem is finished-- story-esque, with nothing left to be desired.
brilliant.
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melodysnow Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013
Thank you so much. :blush:
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I wish... I could write like this T.T:;; so gorgeous
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melodysnow Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012
Awh.. >.< Thank you.
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laffinia Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012
awesome.
no seriously, the twisted language in here is just beautiful
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:iconmelodysnow:
melodysnow Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012
Oh, thank you. <3
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you have been featured here.
i would really appreciate it if you could :+fav: the journal and give some love to the other features! :heart:
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melodysnow Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012
Oh my.. o_o Thank you so much! I will definitely check out the other features. ^^
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
a very nice visual piece. it also had a certain taste to it like here:
"tiny birds with oil-slick wings
and salt-stripped throats drowned in her esophagus" I got an earthy taste, and kind of slick (with the copious amount of s)
and then of course the whiskey and stale tobacco.

I think in some parts the flow stumbled, for instance:
"like he loves the lichens growing on his spinal cord
compared to the vastness of his embrace"
it sounds like you are comparing his love to his embrace here so after "embrace" I sort
of stopped and then yanked to a start when I realized that wasn't the case.

also here:
"the toxic spill leaving her susceptible
and her tiny birds..."
I would change 'leaving' to 'leaves'

I would also suggest removing some of the ands there at the end.

It's all up to you though; these are all my opinions so you're welcome to disregard.

Overall, a nice piece :)
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melodysnow Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
Thank you for the feedback! I added some sparse punctuation; hopefully, it will clear up the confusion and help it read more smoothly. I didn't change the last stanza, however. I read it a couple times with your suggestions and it just didn't click for me. I do appreciate your advice, though.

Thank you, again. ^^
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome!
ah, the punctuation helps :nod:
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