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the grooves of her old skin
are filled with the forgotten languages
of a thousand lost peoples,
abandoned by gods trapped in their infancy.
she carries the weight of these memories downstream
and carves their stories into the sides of cliffs;
but we have forgotten how to read her words—
braille-spells and earthen-magick
—her belly is full and sick,
and we are illiterate children
basking in the afterthought of our own ruin.
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~Meggie272 Mar 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful - kind of a raw yet elegant sense of loss throughout this.
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:iconmelodysnow:
Thank you so much.
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*lombregrise Mar 23, 2013  Professional Writer
Hi! your great piece is featured here [link] :rose:
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:iconmelodysnow:
Thank you so much!
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*lombregrise Mar 23, 2013  Professional Writer
:rose:
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~AMWeitz Jan 11, 2013  Student Writer
I'm absolutely floored by the eloquence and depth of this piece. I love the personification, first of all. And your diction, phrasing, rhythm...goodness, the WAY you say things. Let's say I were to paraphrase it: "The river is filled with the memories of a thousand extinct civilizations, which it inscribes on the sides of cliffs through slow erosion. We have forgotten how to read the language she uses, however, since we do not truly understand our pasts, and the river is sick because of it." Because of the subject matter and ideas, it's still beautiful! But your mastery of language and poetic devices elevate it from beautiful to ethereal, eternal.

I'm printing this out and keeping it with me forever. Just letting you know.

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:iconmelodysnow:
Ahaha, thank you so much! :XD:
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~monstroooo Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is lovely. Very sad, I agree with the other commenters. There's a sense that we've lost something important because we're too busy looking forward to take the time to look back.
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:iconmelodysnow:
Thank you! <3
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:iconcerealnovels:
Lovely and sad.
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