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the grooves of her old skin
are filled with the forgotten languages
of a thousand lost peoples,
abandoned by gods trapped in their infancy.
she carries the weight of these memories downstream
and carves their stories into the sides of cliffs;
but we have forgotten how to read her words—
braille-spells and earthen-magick
—her belly is full and sick,
and we are illiterate children
basking in the afterthought of our own ruin.
inspired by ~anotherforestfire's "bed"
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Randomization1998 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love the imagery! its so clear yet makes you think. good job!
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melodysnow Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013
Thank you so much!
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Meggie272 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful - kind of a raw yet elegant sense of loss throughout this.
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melodysnow Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2013
Thank you so much.
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Professional Writer
Hi! your great piece is featured here [link] :rose:
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melodysnow Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013
Thank you so much!
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Professional Writer
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AMWeitz Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Student Writer
I'm absolutely floored by the eloquence and depth of this piece. I love the personification, first of all. And your diction, phrasing, rhythm...goodness, the WAY you say things. Let's say I were to paraphrase it: "The river is filled with the memories of a thousand extinct civilizations, which it inscribes on the sides of cliffs through slow erosion. We have forgotten how to read the language she uses, however, since we do not truly understand our pasts, and the river is sick because of it." Because of the subject matter and ideas, it's still beautiful! But your mastery of language and poetic devices elevate it from beautiful to ethereal, eternal.

I'm printing this out and keeping it with me forever. Just letting you know.

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melodysnow Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013
Ahaha, thank you so much! :XD:
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monstroooo Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is lovely. Very sad, I agree with the other commenters. There's a sense that we've lost something important because we're too busy looking forward to take the time to look back.
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